Heart throbbing
Mind racing
The breeze is filled with scraps…
Flying through the air…
Bombarding my external senses…
But I find stillness in the internal quiet.
Except, it really isn’t about my external senses.. IS IT?
So I open my eyes and there is calm in my immediate vicinity. However, the bystander standing across the street looks perplexed. Out of concern and curiosity, I fix my gaze on him.
In turn, the bystander looks at me and offers a helping hand!
I’m confused!
In a reflective state, it dawns on me…. Am I the one in need of help?
Hacks of life 
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This is a very good literary piece. Brief and thought-provoking. I’ll ask some of my studies to analyse this literary work. I am sure to get intriguing comments.
i will share them with you.
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This is encouraging! Thank you Lincoln and yes, please do! I love feedback
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I asked them to analyze them as a literary piece.
Question: In what ways does the writer use language to convey their overarching message to their audience?
Student 1: The writer uses powerful verbs to contribute to their portrayal of the overarching message which is to illustrate how internal thoughts may not be perceived properly externally. Verbs like ‘Throbbing’, ‘Bombarding’, and ‘Racing’, exemplify the intense and emotional turmoil this individual must have felt. With these words the writer depicts feelings of anxiety and distress, contributing to the work’s overarching message.
Additionally, the writer also uses rhetorical questions to further elaborate their confusion. Using questions such as ‘Am I the one in need of help?’ and ‘IS IT?’ give the readers the impression that the individual is confused as they signal uncertainty.
Student 2: The writer uses ‘scraps’ to suggest little pieces of the conversation and uses ‘breeze’ to suggest the mode through which the little pieces of the conversation were carried out. Furthermore, ‘scraps’ may also suggest the pieces of the writer, suggesting that what the writer heard, broke the writer.
The writer also uses ‘bystander’ to suggest someone who is unaware of the situation the person is in. However, the bystander notices the inner destruction of the writer. Thus, decides to help the writer either by comforting the writer or offering shrink services to the writer.
Student 3: The protagonist is becoming unconscious because of the “pollution’s effects”. The feeling of being unconscious seems extremely calming and peaceful that the protagonist does not seem to realize the bystander is trying to see them.
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Wow… This is quite spot on!!!! It’s heartwarming to know that my written work was understood 🙂
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